How Fiction Writers Exploit the Mind-Body Connection

You texted the wrong person—you blush—you feel embarrassed. A snake slithers toward you—you lurch backward and hyperventilate—you feel afraid. You scored a soccer goal—you pump your fist—you feel elated.

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In Science

Note the order: stimulus—physical response—emotion. It’s as if your body knows, in advance, how you’re about to feel. According to scientists, it does.

Your body reacts first, before your brain feels an emotion. How can your body react so fast and your brain lag so far behind? If our mighty brain distinguishes us from other animals, why that slow response?

Rather than a bug in the system, think of it as a feature. Our species evolved to prioritize readiness over reflection, survival over sentiment. This post by Christine Walter and this post by the Eastside Counseling Center discuss the phenomenon in more detail.

In Fiction

Knowing this human characteristic, how do fiction writers exploit it? How can you use it in your stories?

In books, characters often respond to a stimulus—an event or spoken dialogue. A given character’s body reacts in an instant, most often in an appropriate and unconscious way. That physical reaction may or may not be noticeable to other characters. A moment later, the character feels one or more emotions.

For Point-of-View characters, the writer may (or may not) state the emotion felt. For non-POV characters, the writer must convey their emotions in a second-hand way—by physical actions, tone of voice, word choice, etc.

Sabyasachi Roy expressed these ideas well in this post.

Show, Don’t Tell

A writer may omit naming the emotion, allowing the reader to infer it. Often, the bodily reaction suffices to inform the reader what the character is feeling. Flared nostrils, bared teeth, and flinty eyes convey enough without having to state the character’s anger.

Not only does showing the body reaction make it unnecessary to tell the emotion, it makes for superior story-telling. Readers want to feel emotions along with the characters. Show readers the tingling of a spine, the gasp, the shallow sigh. Don’t just tell us the character felt scared, awed, or nostalgic. In fact, avoid naming emotions at all—allow readers to feel them.

The Emotion Thesaurus

While writing, I struggle to think of the appropriate bodily reactions for a given emotion, especially if I’m not feeling it myself. The Emotion Thesaurus by Angela Ackerman and Becca Puglisi rescues me every time. This valuable resource provides lists of physical signals for seventy-five emotions. Look up the feeling and peruse the list of bodily reactions. A given character won’t display all the physical signals on the list, so select one or two appropriate ones. You needn’t describe the bodily reaction the same way the thesaurus does. Choose your own words. The book serves as a catalyst for your creativity.

Leaning back in my chair, hands clasped behind my head, smiling as I review this post, I’m—

Poseidon’s Scribe

You Bored Your Reader—Here’s How to Prevent That

As a writer, you can’t afford to bore readers. Modern technology has dwindled their attention spans to a few seconds before they hit Delete. I’ll give you some techniques for writing stories that capture and sustain attention.

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The Problem

We live in a fast-paced age. Busier than ever, your readers get blasted every day with an information fire-hose, spewing mostly useless noise. What doesn’t attract attention gets deleted or remains unclicked.

The book you’re writing will vie for reader eyeball time against many competitors—other author’s books, TV shows, movies, Facebook, X, Instagram, Tiktok, etc. Readers abhor boredom. They’ve no time to read dull prose. If the story’s first paragraph doesn’t trigger a dopamine hit, readers won’t continue.

Anti-Boredom Techniques

I drew inspiration for today’s topic from this post by Sabyasachi Roy. I’ll list his techniques, put into my words.

  • Learn from other’s successes. Consider techniques proven to work. Sabyasachi Roy suggests you analyze what it is about certain Facebook or X posts, or Netflix series, that grab attention and tell a story too irresistible to ignore.
  • Seize interest from the start. Your opening sentence and paragraph must compel the reader to read on. Spend time crafting and re-writing this hook, since it serves multiple purposes.
  • Use the high-low-high-low technique. As the story goes, alternate high-tension moments with low-tension moments.
  • Understand high-tension moments. High-tension needn’t mean a fist fight, a car crash, or an explosion. It means putting your protagonist under high emotional strain. Use short sentences and short paragraphs here to hasten the pace.
  • Use low-tension moments to let characters and readers catch a breath. Don’t put them to sleep, though. Pack these moments with meaning—thoughts and emotions that suggest the themes of your story. Allow the characters time to react to what just happened, and to wonder—or dread—what will happen next.
  • Add surprises and twists. Disrupt the reader’s notions of where the story is going.
  • Start with high stakes for the character. Then raise them. What bad thing will occur if the character fails? Lost love? Poverty? Diminished social status? Death? If possible, make the consequences more dire as the story proceeds.
  • Leave your character hanging from a metaphorical (or actual) cliff at each chapter’s end. Cliffhangers deny readers the chance to end their reading session there.
  • Kill darlings. When re-writing, cut all unnecessary words, sentences, paragraphs, scenes, and chapters. Delete or condense the parts that bore you, since they’ll also bore readers.

Your Book

I hear you. You’re telling me your book doesn’t belong in the thriller genre. It’s a slow-paced, thoughtful book, a deeply philosophical tome meant to be savored, not sped through on the way to something else.

Even so, you don’t want to bore readers. Some of the above techniques may still apply to your book. It still needs to pass the “So What?” Test.

As Lincoln said, “You can bore all of the people some of the time…” Wait. That wasn’t Lincoln. That was—

Poseidon’s Scribe